| #1 mistears[97509] |
| sc-66-27-186-128.socal.rr.com |
| comments and especially tips on br or game is very welcomed. |
| #2 luae42[97511] |
| 64-60-21-42-cust.telepacific.net |
| Fifth comment is mine! |
| #3 ..DiSTuRBeD[97512] |
| burlingcache.lisco.net |
| I got completely lost during the description of the drops, and that kind of turned me off of the rest of the br. The intro was written well, but honestly you could have done without it just as easily. |
| #4 willwinforfood[97514] |
| ool-18b81465.dyn.optonline.net |
it was a little confusing at times, but i found it more enjoyable then some br's that have pics.
more detail would be good and even just minimaps would help my simple mind. some things came as a surprise to me, like the wraiths. you were both just hurting for money then you afforded those suckers. that goes back to detail. some of these battles seemed cool, especially the first 2 attacks. pics showing how intense it was would have added a lot since you didnt really describe the attack a lot.
just work on the detail and little things. good job and thanks for the cool read.
-wwff |
| #5 Phukin Retard[97515] |
| AKCF2.xtra.co.nz |
many droppings, although how he managed to lose 20 lings to a tank and a bunker i will never know.
oh wait he didn't target the scv did he, what a foo |
| #6 Drintr[97516] |
| user133.pop2.cwia.com |
I liked it. Although, as stated above, some parts were a bit confusing. I'm guessing this report will get a 6. Good job and write same more.
Peace and Love,
Drintr |
| #7 Drintr[97517] |
| user133.pop2.cwia.com |
err same=some
hehe |
| #8 someone[97522] |
| sc-66-27-186-137.socal.rr.com |
8th! aww...
i was suposed to be higher... |
| #9 mistears[97523] |
| sc-66-27-186-128.socal.rr.com |
| i wud like to specifically know wt was confusing?? |
| #10 somoene[97524] |
| sc-66-27-186-137.socal.rr.com |
nice br. yellow on black = bad on eyes.
pictures = good too :) |
| #11 dreamindigital[97525] |
| spider-ntc-ta062.proxy.aol.com |
| Yeah some pics of the battles would've helped. |
| #12 willwinforfood[97528] |
| ool-18b81465.dyn.optonline.net |
"I got three dropships, one with tanks and the others with marines. I sent them on their way, unloaded all my cargo, and tried to get a good spot to rain hell on him. I sieged and unsieged towards his base slowly while he again floated his overlords to a unseen spot, dropped his army, then attacked me with about 16 hydras and 2 lurkers."
where did you unload, and if they were in drop ships why did you have to slowly push into his base? where did he drop his stuff etc. |
| #13 skimoose[97534] |
| hoproxy.proxy.lucent.com |
wwff: "....and I sent my science vessel on a scouting mission for possible drop sites. This time it was at the western-most part of his base, a good spot for security. I got three dropships, one with tanks and the others with marines. I sent them on their way, unloaded all my cargo....etc"
It clearly states where he dropped his troops. The zerg dropping stuff is a little confusing, but it sounds like he dropped the lurks/lisks out of the terrans site, then attacked.
All in all I really enjoyed it. It flowed well and I thought he used a good amount of detail where it was needed . (I visualize well, so for ppl that dont, disregard that last part). About the yellow text.....um what can I say? Its readable and IMO not as bad as white on black. GJ mistears, I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. |
| #14 Psyonic_Reaver[97544] |
| 1Cust187.tnt1.bend.or.da.uu.net |
| I see you have the same white bar as I have had in my last BR. =) Good BR. Pics are gosu so use'em lots. I'd say this will get about a 6. |
#15  [97554] |
| papaya.fgm.com |
Everything's already been said... a good-flowing text-only with some vague parts that could be improved with a little more detail (esp. the wraiths at the end)
Cheers. |
| #16 willwinforfood[97560] |
| ool-18b81465.dyn.optonline.net |
| it doesnt clearly state it. i'll admit i missed it, but i still dont get a good picture of the battle. i'm guessing he dropped it as far away from creep as he could then slowly moved it? let me re-read.. |
| #17 ground-LOBP-[97694] |
| syr-24-169-180-86.twcny.rr.com |
"loyalness" - loyalty / "addicting" - addictive
it'd be nice if you had paragraph separation (or even paragraphs at all)
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| #18 ground-LOBP-[97714] |
| syr-24-169-180-86.twcny.rr.com |
| I noticed you had separating spaces afterward, sorry... paragraphs would have been nice though |
| #19 )(V)(aster[97958] |
| spider-to071.proxy.aol.com |
"unless it was for expanding or for future pileup" - You might want to proof read next time...
All in all, A good read... With your writing a few pics would go a long way though...
--Litz |
#20  [101836] |
| mp-217-202-138.daxnet.no |
^^
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#21  [101837] |
| mp-217-202-138.daxnet.no |
| sdaa |
| #22 FlameBird[102813] |
| 213-187-173-43.dd.nextgentel.com |
| A good report |
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