| #1 Keanu_Reaver[109462] |
| max01-dynamic-64-65-141-31.sea.eschelon.com |
*sry for taking 1*
this is the second part to the story, told ya i'd have it out today ^^
umm, well as you can see i got some html in there thx to some ppl who told me how to make reverse text
and like usual, criticism flames whatever is welcome, just make sure you tell me how to improve ^^ |
| #2 Adrenaling[109463] |
| CPE002078e0f4b2.cpe.net.cable.rogers.com |
| 1st non author |
| #3 |||l||||ll|||||[109466] |
| cdm-66-6-147-tylr.cox-internet.com |
| die |
| #4 TIME is not on YOUR SIDE[109468] |
| h000a277d260a.ne.mediaone.net |
| 2 |
| #5 |]agomar[109473] |
| Ottawa-ppp3517212.sympatico.ca |
| Nice, like your last. 7! |
| #6 BigD[109476] |
| px2so.cg.shawcable.net |
| I'm really glad this didn't go where I expected it. Keep writing please :) |
| #7 [109477] |
| dsl092-169-187.wdc1.dsl.speakeasy.net |
good job! the first one was a little bad though, but this one was very detailed. i give a 8!
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| #8 SiG.[109480] |
| host-216-77-217-168.fll.bellsouth.net |
Fence, stfu. Keanu, this is some really great stuff man, i cant wait till your next chapter..
There are only like 3 things your forgetting.
1. Protoss dont have mouths, they cant smile
2. Dark templar are hated by protoss.
3. Your next part, GOGOGO make it!
8 |
| #9 Mjotnar[109519] |
| client-151-200-161-80.bellatlantic.net |
Sig, you obviously haven't played the single player Starcraft scenarios, or you'd realize the dark templar aren't hated by the Protoss. And don't try to classify dark templar as non-Protoss, cause they are Protoss, just not part of the Conclave.
Good story. I was about to say something about how this kinda didn't make sense but I guess I gotta go read the first part =]. It was sad how that one young zealot kept getting it up the butt. Vespene burns, reaver discomfort, attacked by mutas, and then killed by hydras. Oh well. Wish some of the other zealots/goons of the group had survived though. This is kinda like a Star Trek episode in which all the nameless people die and the guys with names get saved at the last second by mysterious forces t.t
7 |
| #10 Keanu_Reaver[109520] |
| max01-dynamic-64-65-141-31.sea.eschelon.com |
| that wasnt coincedence that Xaniir and Kelvena were the only ones to survive, but the reason why wont come for a while down the line in the story so dont expect it any time soon |
| #11 stardust8297[109534] |
| sdn-ar-010casfrMP026.dialsprint.net |
| well i was extremely impressed by this story so far. i don't normally read this kinda story, but this one was definitely worth reading. it was well written and very imaginative. hehe and you gotta love the characters =) great story flash, keep writing =P |
| #12 Me[109554] |
| sdcax49-146.dialup.optusnet.com.au |
Great story! good story line, exciting, suspencesful ect. ect.
8 |
| #13 SiG.[109603] |
| host-209-214-80-105.fll.bellsouth.net |
| Mjotnar, ok, maybe your right, the DT arent hated by all protoss, but they do not like them. The religious protoss totally hate them. the Khala teachers or whatever, judicators i think..Read the starcraft books man, it says so. Zels dont like them cuz they ph34r them |
| #14 Keanu_Reaver[109621] |
| max01-dynamic-64-65-141-26.sea.eschelon.com |
thx for the vote of confidence star :D guess my pestering finally made you post eh? :)
anyway to clear something else up, protoss dont have mouths, no, but in my story they do because i want them to both talk and send telepathic message's
well, i plan on getting the next part out probably this weekend, but i might not be able to since i am a lil busy, thx for reading everyone :D |
| #15 Chacmool06[110109] |
| dialup-63.215.236.205.Dial1.Stamford1.Level3.net |
| I really enjoyed this story but 1 thing is Zealots dont drop dead really they get sent back to Aiur(spelling?) |
| #16 chocolate[120753] |
| adsl-66-127-53-211.dsl.snfc21.pacbell.net |
| ummm... eat me? |
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