| #1 triped[112083] |
| 63.85.132.17 |
Not a bad story
6
now post a real br =] |
| #2 c4t[112084] |
| h002078d395d4.ne.client2.attbi.com |
werd
7-8 |
| #3 Keanu_Reaver[112085] |
| max01-dynamic-64-65-141-125.sea.eschelon.com |
very nice, but still a few typos ;) i thought it was pretty good honestly
7 |
| #4 EffSync[112086] |
| cs242234-40.houston.rr.com |
theres a type on your final sentence...yeah, the one saying you don't make typos
(typo intended) |
| #5 Dino Din[112089] |
| dynamic-152-109.dorm.natpool.uc.edu |
| 5 on a fan fic blah im losing my edge |
| #6 Eradicate~Me[112090] |
| pa-millscreek2a-449.buf.adelphia.net |
| "no typos" haha |
| #7 NotDefault[112091] |
| h24-83-95-176.vs.shawcable.net |
Odd. I guess you're going for a toned-down Drefsab-style weird fan-fic.
NotDefault |
| #8 CaughtNaked[112092] |
| pcp831326pcs.nrockv01.md.comcast.net |
| asdf |
| #9 OnSlaughT[112093] |
| wc01.ym.rnc.net.cable.rogers.com |
I don't get it.
Was the no typos thing a joke? I ask because there is a typo in every paragraph.
If so, your sarcasm is five steps ahead of me.
If not, you're just drawing people to look for mistakes, and mistakes-a-plenty there are.
Also, on a separate note, the ending seemed kind of rushed. The final few sentences could have been extended a little longer?
Other than that, it was a good plot-driven story. No huge message in this though. |
| #10 'Final`Flare'[112094] |
| spider-mtc-tb042.proxy.aol.com |
| Not bad. |
| #11 CaughtNaked[112095] |
| pcp831326pcs.nrockv01.md.comcast.net |
thats not,
"101010 naked is my hero! naked for hof!"
flare :P |
| #12 Rowdy[112096] |
| adsl-64-123-174-218.dsl.rcsntx.swbell.net |
"101010 naked is my hero! naked for hof!"
scawwily wierd, but still good.
7-8? |
| #13 triped[112097] |
| 63.85.132.17 |
just wanted to say that this kicked ass
however
all you stupid fucks trying to give it gold are stupid fucks
but yes it did kick ass |
| #14 reaqu[112098] |
| cache-1.lnh.md.webcache.rcn.net |
Interesting...now do a real br;) good story though
6 |
| #15 Darth Sidious[112099] |
| d2235.upc-d.chello.nl |
It is way to short.
The story just goes to fast this way, no good.
|
| #16 [112100] |
| adsl-63-201-90-246.dsl.snfc21.pacbell.net |
"I hope you guys liked this. Notice that theres no typos common in my reports. At least I hope not... Anyways, comment comment comment!"
sorry to be anal..... but this is hilarious.... your sentence about no typos had a typo..... it's "there's" and anyway.... grammatically it should be "there are"......
irony at its best..... hmm great i just read #4.... oh well, had to get my 2 cents in anyway |
| #17 LuckyNewbie:P[112101] |
| dialup-209.245.9.128.Dial1.Denver1.Level3.net |
get a life
i hope those r copy pasted
:}
:P |
| #18 Anonymous[112103] |
| 209-162-58-130.thegrid.net |
reminds me of Lord of the Rings.
"MINE MINE MINE!"
|
| #19 funnymarx[112104] |
| dhcp085206.res-hall.nwu.edu |
Anyone know the band TSOL??
Is anyone else thinking of the same song as me??
--funnymarx
"Middle of the night, so silently, I creep on over to the..." |
| #20 badtz maru[112105] |
| pcp108471pcs.echryh01.nj.comcast.net |
#4 EffSync[112086]
cs242234-40.houston.rr.com
theres a type on your final sentence...yeah, the one saying you don't make typos
(typo intended)
OMG EFF LOL LZOLZOZLOZ ROFEELFLDFODLZLZOZLZOLZ
you cease to amaze me.
interesting cn. |
| #21 stonecoldnewbie[112106] |
| c-24-245-64-22.mn.client2.attbi.com |
| hi cn |
| #22 aMOEBA_bOY[112108] |
| spider-mtc-tb032.proxy.aol.com |
nOW THATS JUST PLAIN DISTURBING
aND AS SAID BEFORE, THERE ARE PLENTY OF TYPOS, THERES A SEMICOLON (;) WHERE A COMMA SHOULD BE AND A WORD AT THE BEGINING OF A SENTENCES THAT ISNT CAPATALIZED. jUST TO NAME A FEW. |
| #23 Amoeba_Boy[112109] |
| spider-mtc-tb032.proxy.aol.com |
| Damn caps lock, didnt notice it was on, go me |
| #24 SiG.[112115] |
| host-216-77-220-52.fll.bellsouth.net |
Personally, I found this storu disturbing..
I had an idea though, when you were talking about here "looking at him" when he dragged here outta the pond, and she "almost seemed alive" I figured you were going to make it a horror.
That would have totally owned. Like, after he took her outta the water and shit.. Know how a person can survive in waters or -32 degrees farenheit for over like 15 mins cuz their hearts slow down so much its like being in cryo stasis for a lil bit.. Maybe she had fallen in or something, and he pulled her out in time, and later on she woke up and was evil and some shit.
Whoa, losing myself here.. but that would have been cool. |
| #25 |||l||||ll|||||[112124] |
| 66.76.9.56 |
| ick |
| #26 hahaha[112126] |
| c-24-245-64-22.mn.client2.attbi.com |
| rofl @ 22-23 |
| #27 Kobane[112130] |
| dialups-276.palmer.mtaonline.net |
| lol freaky man freaky |
| #28 Ling-erie[112132] |
| proxy2.leeds.ac.uk |
what the hell was that?
ban |
| #29 GoZuLu[112140] |
| 195.249.56.3 |
This is not new. I have seen this before. I can't remember where, so i can't prove it. I have seen this before ....
GoZuLu |
| #30 [SM]Strega~F[112141] |
| 1Cust73.tnt9.adl1.da.uu.net |
Hi.
Strega |
| #31 MatriX[112145] |
| h000094c60a57.ne.client2.attbi.com |
| good ole necrophilia |
| #32 katome[112152] |
| px2ar.ed.shawcable.net |
| Blue-eyes blonds make me sick. |
| #33 |||ll||||ll|||||[112163] |
| sdn-ar-004nmalbuP226.dialsprint.net |
| I read the title and stopped... |
| #34 (...BlaZe...)[112164] |
| kipc0142fw.kongsberg.net |
| great read ;) Make more, gogo --; |
| #35 ChessShark[112171] |
| 63.207.255.47 |
| Plz, Real BRs only. This isnt Fan-fic land. |
| #36 MatriX[112177] |
| h000094c60a57.ne.client2.attbi.com |
| who said you cant post fan fics? in fact, the raters support it (even the ones who dont read them support the fact that people are allowed to post them).. at least from my experience |
| #37 Manius[112215] |
| adsl-81-167-85.asm.bellsouth.net |
| Funny shit...You guys complaining about the abundance of fan fics...CaughtNaked writes one...you guys seem to...love it. Logical? No. Biased? Yes, very. Ignorant? I think so. |
| #38 katome[112216] |
| px2ar.ed.shawcable.net |
| are you an idiot? yes. |
| #39 CaughtNaked[112220] |
| pcp831326pcs.nrockv01.md.comcast.net |
| GoZuLu your and idiot. This was written by my friend from skool and I thought id post it for her to see what rating it got. |
| #40 vincible[112224] |
| roam155-218.student.harvard.edu |
I've read a similar story too a long time ago, but I think the similarities are just coincidental. I guess necrophilia is not as uncommon as I would like to think.
I think it's just coincidental because this isn't anywhere near the level of a professionally written story. There are the typos and some awkward phrases here and there. I'm not saying it's bad... I'm just saying that, like almost all stories, it's not good enough to be published. |
| #41 ZerG~LinG[112232] |
| p434-068.ppp.get2net.dk |
41th!
6, me like.
I like br's more than fanfics, but I think fanfics are an important part of br.com
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| #42 CrackHeadJeb[112256] |
| mu-197049.dhcp.missouri.edu |
An original and vivid fanfic, I enjoyed this a lot. There were a few typos and grammatical mistakes, the story is a tad short, and the ending was a bit unsatisfactory for my tastes (I don't know what could've been different, it just seemed to end the story quite abruptly). Despite all of that, it's clear that you put a lot of thought in writing this story.
I think it deserves gold. Great job.
-CHJ |
| #43 Amoeba_Boy[112267] |
| spider-mtc-tb063.proxy.aol.com |
| uhhhhhh, CHJ, if you read #39 youll see naked didnt write this. So he put no thought into it at all |
| #44 CrackHeadJeb[112277] |
| mu-197049.dhcp.missouri.edu |
| ah, okay, then all of the praise is directed to naked's friend ;) |
| #45 CaughtNaked[112368] |
| pcp831326pcs.nrockv01.md.comcast.net |
| well, she did do the writing but I did help a lot. aparently most girls dont dream about feeling up dead girls...strange. |
| #46 Mr.Mediocre[112397] |
| 149.149.205.38 |
| You should let him keep her longer. :D |
| #47 stephen[112408] |
| calnet29-119.gtecablemodem.com |
| what does FIN at the end mean? |
| #48 wtf[112538] |
| AC8CBA76.ipt.aol.com |
"This was written killing time for ShadowD'Arc to get off his butt and start work on our report... Anyways, enjoy the story. "
here it says it was written while killing time. I thought someone at school wrote it?
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| #49 CaughtNaked[112624] |
| pcp831326pcs.nrockv01.md.comcast.net |
| wat i ment with that is that i finished my report and was waiting to talk to shadow, in the mean time since i didnt hav anything else to do i helped a friend. who is also a fan of this site, even though she has no comp:p |
| #50 LuckyNewbie:P[112888] |
| dialup-209.245.0.1.Dial1.Denver1.Level3.net |
CN gets gold? whats this?
good job! |
| #51 alias king[138032] |
| pool0135.cvx23-bradley.dialup.earthlink.net |
| where am i? what is battlereports.com about? |
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