| #1 Franklin James[107582] |
| mkc-65-26-21-5.kc.rr.com |
| first! |
| #2 stonecoldnewbie[107583] |
| 24.245.64.22 |
| :[ |
| #3 Patton1944[107584] |
| spider-tn021.proxy.aol.com |
| Pretty good. And 2nd. |
| #4 Patton1944[107585] |
| spider-tn021.proxy.aol.com |
| Damn you stonecoldnewbie. |
| #5 retardedboy[107586] |
| px2cv.gv.shawcable.net |
Pretty nice but it was a little short overall, and at the end i didn't even know that method had hydras or that he had upgraded. So a little more information would be nice.
Good for first time though |
| #6 Dogbert108[107587] |
| slip-32-102-237-68.fl.us.prserv.net |
| What happened was that I made this huge Article. I did say he had hydras drifting earlier, but I missed him upgrading when I was making notes and just noticed it, so instead of watching teh replay for a 3rd time, I just posted it. |
| #7 Sovereignty[107588] |
| wsip68-15-45-159.ri.ri.cox.net |
Hm. Not bad for a first. The writing was ok, although I remember you saying "Apparently being as isolated as he was, he had no choice and made some shuttles and stuff". Dont ever say "and stuff" :)
There were a few other minor things like that but you get the idea. Keep it up, and add pics next time. |
| #8 katome[107590] |
| px2ar.ed.shawcable.net |
The writing is fine, just a few notes: 'MIA Reaver'... wtf is that? and 'Probe Nathan' for one means nothing to me, and two came out of the middle of nowhere. And albino refers to living things ;)
You didn't go into enough detail really, there were very many places were I had only a vague idea of what was going on... like it was no contest, or because of his crazy micro he won the battle... you prolly know the places I'm talking about, places like that need waaaaay more detail. Personally I like text onlys, so no pics is fine with me if you get the text right ;)
I'd say 6.5-7 |
| #9 Dogbert108[107595] |
| slip-32-102-237-68.fl.us.prserv.net |
| Thanks alot people. But a few things. I did intend this to use pictures, infact I had about 7 collages ready, including pictures from The Containment, The Shield Battery assault thingy, The attacks on each other's base, an opening pic, and wait...Thats 5. Anyways, MIA is a military term for Missing In Action, which this guy was for about 2 minutes, so I thought it mighta been clever. I never actually thought describing battles would become so hard, but most ended up tedious. "Bob Attacked with goons, Took down 7 lings, retreated, returned, Etc." I edited it too much. My Thesarus said that Albino was an aternate meaning for white, hell with that. Thanks for commenting though. |
| #10 Dogbert108[107596] |
| slip-32-102-237-68.fl.us.prserv.net |
| And yes I found the coffee beans. |
| #11 katome[107597] |
| px2ar.ed.shawcable.net |
| oh lol thats some thesaurus. maybe thats slang now I don't know, but its actual meaning is for an organism born without color hence reddish eyes white white skin and hair. they are usually color blind. |
| #12 John[107598] |
| adsl-63-206-88-68.dsl.snfc21.pacbell.net |
| Its was pretty good for a first 6-7 |
| #13 DMage[107599] |
| dialup-236.tcinternet.net |
"3 zealots were pounding away at MeThoD's Sunkens and hatcheries using the Shield Battery to heal sheilds from the sunkens blows. MeThoD's Spawning pool finally finshed about then, and soon All the larvae around started to morph to Zerglings."
This didn't make sense to me... Don't you need a spawning pool to make sunkens?? |
| #14 triped[107600] |
| 63.85.132.17 |
no pix kicks ass :D
Keep up the text-only..just need to improve your detail level.. |
| #15 katome[107601] |
| px2ar.ed.shawcable.net |
| dmage where you take that name from :O my 2v2 name is bmage and my part is wmage |
| #16 Anonymous[107602] |
| 216-224-148-51.thegrid.net |
| Oo, too many errors, takes away from the overall quality of the report, ie. "3 zealots were pounding away at MeThoD's Sunkens and hatcheries using the Shield Battery to heal sheilds from the sunkens blows. MeThoD's Spawning pool finally finshed about then, and soon All the larvae around started to morph to Zerglings.", and also at the end when you said Zealots came to counter, but 2 goons vs. lots of hydras was no match. Whadafuk? |
| #17 [107603] |
| slip-32-102-238-201.fl.us.prserv.net |
In response to #13, We all know how outta hand stuff can get when you're writing HTML. After awhile I'll probably catch these things sooner, but god knows. Remember, this is my first HTML that I actually see the result.Its annoying seeing ;ltfont color="teal";gt MeThoD;LT/font Sunkens and hatcheries using the Shield Battery to heal sheilds from the sunkens blows. ;ltfont color="teal";gtMeThoD's;lt/font;gt Spawning pool finally finshed about then, and soon All the larvae around started to morph to Zerglings."
Don't worry, it won't happen again. |
| #18 [107604] |
| slip-32-102-238-201.fl.us.prserv.net |
Dammit!
<font color="teal>MeThoD</font> Sunkens and hatcheries using the Shield Battery to heal sheilds from the sunkens blows. <font color="teal">MeThoD's</font> Spawning pool finally finshed about then, and soon All the larvae around started to morph to Zerglings." I got it swaped around. And why don't these things use HTML?
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| #19 Dogbert108[107605] |
| slip-32-102-238-201.fl.us.prserv.net |
Dammit!
<font color="teal>MeThoD</font> Sunkens and hatcheries using the Shield Battery to heal sheilds from the sunkens blows. <font color="teal">MeThoD's</font> Spawning pool finally finshed about then, and soon All the larvae around started to morph to Zerglings." I got it swaped around. And why don't these things use HTML?
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| #20 katome[107606] |
| px2ar.ed.shawcable.net |
| comments html got disabled long time ago, not sure why. |
| #21 Dogbert108[107608] |
| slip-32-102-238-201.fl.us.prserv.net |
| I have a question though. Just wondering, When using Microsoft Paint, How do I get bigger text and font? When using it, I get only like a Roman Times in 10, which is smaller than this. Also, Katome your BR is awesome, by the by. I read it earlier and didn't realise you were the person who wrote it. GJ. |
| #22 Psyonic_Reaver[107619] |
| dialup-67.24.27.202.Dial1.Portland1.Level3.net |
Hear that CN?
Dogbert is thanking YOU! |
| #23 Anonymous[107620] |
| 216-224-148-51.thegrid.net |
| Yup, HTML's a bitch. Write a funny fanfic, i'm bored. |
| #24 CaughtNaked[107626] |
| spider-tf043.proxy.aol.com |
| i was gonna bitch bout it being to short but then i noticed my name at the end so ill just randomly shout 10 a few times, 10 10 10! |
| #25 Shadow D'Arc[107649] |
| spider-mtc-tc033.proxy.aol.com |
"Fury of the Swarm" as the title fux0rs the entire feel of the game. It tells you who wins if you even read the first paragraph.
Peace,
Shadow D'Arc |
| #26 katome[107659] |
| px2ar.ed.shawcable.net |
actually I didn't draw that thats who won from the first paragraph, I think you connected that after you read; I doubt its a problem.
thx dogbert ;) got prollems with html or something say on the forum and even if everyone else flames I'll try to help ;) |
| #27 Shadow D'Arc[107663] |
| spider-mtc-tc033.proxy.aol.com |
I took a guess at the beginning, and sure 'nuff, I was right.
Peace,
Shadow D'Arc |
#28  [107670] |
| ct91955-a.richmnd1.in.home.com |
Not bad, definitely need to work on fleshing out your story. Text only is fine, but you need to do a better job of explaining things if you aren't going to including pics.
5 |
| #29 BigD[107683] |
| px2so.cg.shawcable.net |
Dogbert Ownz. But writing needs to be a lot better if you're going to do text only (heck, even if you're going to use pics). However, your graphics work is fine, so I have no doubt that if you use pics you'll be fine.
6.5 |
| #30 AZALIN[107698] |
| pppath245.compulink.gr |
| Never read it 'cause the writing color was almost the same as the background one... |
| #31 i duno about you[107729] |
| host-216-77-214-71.fll.bellsouth.net |
but, the protoss had 2 reav in a shuttle, about 30 probes, and 2 goons
vs a nearly dead zerg..
with even shitty micro you could have owned like 10-20 hydras.. that is of course assuming that the zerg doesnt micro you also, taking out the reavs first. |
| #32 DMage[107832] |
| dialup-209.tcinternet.net |
| katome, I got the name from my older one: [)ragon]V[age, but my cousin didn't like typing that out, so I shortened it a bit, and it stuck. |
| #33 [107946] |
| CPE002078e0f4b2.cpe.net.cable.rogers.com |
"Before ya know it, 3 zealots were pounding away at MeThoD's Sunkens and hatcheries using the Shield Battery to heal sheilds from the sunkens blows. MeThoD's Spawning pool finally finshed about then, and soon All the larvae around started to morph to Zerglings."
Hrm, I think you should play a bit more starcraft than that, because I believe you need a pool to make sunkens. Or did he make two pools? lol, and I thought I sucked at starcraft. =[ |
| #34 Dogbert108[107998] |
| slip-32-102-243-241.fl.us.prserv.net |
| Its a damn Typo! So STFU. I am not in a good mood today to be ^#*@ed with. Read the damn comments before saying something we already know. |
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