| #1 Zephyrus[121612] |
| 149.168.54.188 |
| Hope you like this, its something new! =) |
#2  [121613] |
| 139.57.24.192 |
problems:
-lack of plot
-constant shifts in tenses
-use of things like "2/3" and "R&R" in a formal piece of writing.
However you described the action quite well, and some scenes were rather good. 5. |
| #3 ZerG~LinG[121614] |
| p463-63.ppp.get2net.dk |
Excuse me, although its nice too see some eager reporters, you may want to use more time on each report, and maybe even hold a few days before you release it.
It looks like spam when you do like 2 a day.
I'm sorry if this discourages you, but its not like I want you to stop posting, rather slow down a bit and think it through before you submit. |
| #4 Zephyrus[121615] |
| 149.168.54.188 |
| =) |
| #5 Zephyrus[121616] |
| 149.168.54.188 |
| Hmmmm, ok Just eager to see what people think of it. Another five......sigh hoping for gold. Im dreaming of Gold =P Well I'll take more time with the next ones, but mind you they will get longer. |
| #6 I_am_Nitros[121620] |
| h64-141-18-78.sunwave.net |
| yes the vaunted gold, i got first a five... then a six... so close :( |
| #7 I_am_Nitros[121621] |
| h64-141-18-78.sunwave.net |
| I'll never get it, i'm such an uminformed newb... i don't know how to put pictures in :/ |
| #8 Psychochild[121622] |
| 1Cust137.tnt15.orl3.da.uu.net |
Hey I got a gold. Took me about.. 3 br's, until I discovered I could frighten the twenty or so people that actually would read my psychotic stories. Find something that works for ya, and don't get discouraged, k?
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| #9 Orcaroni and Cheeze[121626] |
| 67.40.104.199 |
BONG! BONG! BONG! The call to arms sound rang out. What??! He thought.
I haven't been able to stop laughing since I read this sentence, sounds like a different "call to arms" to me. |
| #10 Decay[121660] |
| 206.10.109.68 |
Roofles @ #9!!!
I got gold too, but then dref came along and gave me a 5. :P
O well, thanxers daggy man.
This was better than the SC fic, but i do hope they get longer, cuz this wasn't long enough to interest me like a real story should. Maybe write two chapters, then submit them together. That'll make Ling happy, too. 6
~Decay |
| #11 Rei[121724] |
| def-dial236.dfsi.net |
This was good, but it had flaws.
But noone is perfect are they?
Just don't get discouraged, and keep trying to improve.
... : ]
-Rei |
| #12 Zephyrus[121726] |
| 149.168.54.188 |
| Whooooha!!! |
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