| #1 SAbotage[137604] |
| pool-68-161-58-251.ny325.east.verizon.net |
| first |
| #2 jmanzzz[137605] |
| 210.0.200.163 |
| second... |
| #3 ZeaL[137609] |
| proxys.ord.marketscore.com |
| Interesting. Gogo compitition for 1st comment. |
| #4 Newt[137613] |
| dsl3-63-249-85-66.cruzio.com |
Fifth...
I thought of your fan-fic as 'truly inspirational' or 'intense, gripping'. It had great description and a plot that made me want to read on for eternity. When will you write a sequel to it? Overall score: 8.5-9, it's hard to decide. Well, signing out!
~Newt
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| #5 Andris[137614] |
| cache-ntc-ad03.proxy.aol.com |
Decent read, you still are trying to grasp English basics, but thats ok everyone that writes fan-fics is half illiterate anyways. ZeaL go suck a cock u fag lovin hillbilly jew ~!~!
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| #6 jimmy[137617] |
| CVPP-p-144-134-113-4.prem.tmns.net.au |
Quite good. 7.5
-NJ |
| #7 2Cautious[137629] |
| adsl-68-72-85-44.dsl.chcgil.ameritech.net |
Well, I thought it was OK. Battles could've been a little more interesting, though.
6-7 |
| #8 Redemption6[137639] |
| 216-164-223-16.c3-0.lex-ubr3.sbo-lex.ma.cable.rcn.com |
I think you should do better battle description, besides that good detail.
7
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| #9 LameJoker[137641] |
| pool-129-44-16-46.alb.east.verizon.net |
| finally, a REAL fanfic. |
| #10 jimmy[137647] |
| prx3.act.schools.net.au |
hahaha LJ
-NJ |
| #11 Manius[137656] |
| ga-cmng-cuda2-c5b-128.cmngga.adelphia.net |
| Alright. So the main problem seems to be battle descriptions. I will certainly work on that. Part IV should be coming out late March, early April. I have mid-terms to get ready for and stuff, so that will alter my time to write. Thanks for the constructive criticism. |
| #12 Andris[137686] |
| cache-ntc-ad03.proxy.aol.com |
YOU'RE IN HIGHSCHOOL?
wow could've fooled me, it seemed like one of those stories kids write in 6th grade. |
| #13 Andris[137706] |
| cache-ntc-ad03.proxy.aol.com |
| Who's gonna stop me? And as for acting like a mature individual, wtf do you think dates are for? Oh right you wouldn't know what a date is. My BAD! |
| #14 Triped[137856] |
| 150.201.107.64.rtc5.illinois.net |
| "burn" |
| #15 Notjim[138095] |
| prx3.act.schools.net.au |
| yay a flame war |
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