| #1 The-Nut[151651] |
| ool-182e1a3b.dyn.optonline.net |
| hope you enjoy. i think this is meh best 1. |
| #2 Sabotage[151653] |
| pool-68-161-122-116.ny325.east.verizon.net |
| Holy shit lol can't wait |
| #3 badme[151655] |
| pcp05314423pcs.norstn01.pa.comcast.net |
Blood Bath?
The mere name sends shivers down my spine. |
#4  [151659] |
| 68.79.174.39 |
| *Approved for viewing*. Looks great, can't wait to read it. |
| #5 Sabotage[151661] |
| pool-68-161-122-116.ny325.east.verizon.net |
"This, however, was a bad idea. Hydralisk and Scourge swarmed my Scouts and were killed in a jiffy."
lol
Yea i skimmed through it. It is by far the best nut report.
I noticed the canvas texture on the pictures, very good but it did get tedious after awhile. It was really neat though, and put together well. |
| #6 Sabotage[151663] |
| pool-68-161-122-116.ny325.east.verizon.net |
| Trev i'm going on vacation btw, 1 week i'll be back. ;[ |
#7  [151666] |
| nr11-216-196-185-193.fuse.net |
Holy smokes. Scouts vs Zerg?
=[
But I'm not here to critique your playing style (yet!) so I'll start with the bad...
First off was the writing. You had one, maybe two paragraphs inbetween each collage and seemed content to let the images tell the story of the game. Your images were great (as I'll detail later) so it was a shame to have so little writing. Although, with the amount of grammar errors and weirdly used words (his force was sabotaged?), not to ignore the simple boredom I experienced while reading I've come to the conclusion that you need to read more, and grab a dictionary. Learn grammar as well, it helps. A lot of your sentences sounded weird, which could have been remedied by reading the report out loud. You have very little style, very dry and unentertaining writing. Keep working.
The coding of the report was fairly decent. I thought you overused color-coding names (I get it, you're yellow) and the fact that the report was sitting on a white backdrop looked very weird. Better than your previous, however.
The images were good. Well put-together, flashy (overly flashy, I thought. Keep it minimal next time) and descriptive. You even had minimaps! With a bit more of a controlled hand (i.e, jeeze, man, lay off the scanlines and the dripping text) and some better borders, they'd be very good indeed.
The game, however, was awful. Your opponent was toying with you from the first (as evidenced by his construction of an air force) and you got beat down nearly every fight. My biggest gripe was scouts. Honestly. Scouts are very, VERY expensive and worthless against Zerg. 8 damage vs Hydralisks = no. The money could be better spent towards the good anti-zerg units such as Corsairs (which do own air, by the way), dragoons, zealots and templar. Next time, I recommend you report a game played by pros, not you, until you improve your skill.
Overall, despite the flashy images and improved coding, the writing was still poor and the game was also poor. This makes for a solidly silver report. Keep on trying.
6 |
| #8 Shuriken[151669] |
| ool-182e1a3b.dyn.optonline.net |
He did use Corsairs, Temps, and Goons.
If you're talking about the amount of them, i guess there could've been a few more.
Pics were nice, no complaints
Writing was fair.
Overall i still think this is worth a 7 |
| #9 Decay[151678] |
| 66.44.173.10 |
| By far the best report I have ever seen from you. The pics were quite good I thought, but, like ee said, the writing was bland. It seemed like you either overused a thesaurus or you just misused some words. Not a big deal. The game however, wasn't the best. Overall, I'd say it's a solid 7. But then, I'm not a rater. :) |
| #10 TwistedNecro[151679] |
| lsanca1-ar54-4-3-202-139.lsanca1.dsl-verizon.net |
| Skimmed a bit, but I wanted to let you know something. It was sorta okay that you colored your name, and whenever you were talking about yourself with a my, me, I, etc you colored it. But the problem was you didn't follow through. You colored my 1/2 and 1/2 it was the normal text color. The rest has already been said before. |
| #11 OverTheUnder[151694] |
| 12-216-178-164.client.mchsi.com |
| Good report on a not quite as good game....skill wasnt the best but it was entertaining:D 7 |
#12  [151701] |
| 67.176.104.160 |
Colored names aren't really necessary in a 1v1 game, especially if you are narrating from first person. There are only two players: you and your opponent, and it's not that hard to keep track of. In 2v2's and free-for-alls, however, it's a very good idea to color-code the names. The Yellow "I"s and "My"s were getting annoying towards the end.
As for the game, it was hard to follow through the writing. You committed the sin of allowing a dozen siege tanks to appear from nowhere on more than one occassion (exemplified by those 18 scouts). Tense was also switched randomly. And simple sentences made up the entire report. I'm glad I'm not your english teacher. ;)
The images were nice, they covered the action appropriately. I could do without the scan lines though, with shrunken images they just lose detail. It has the same effect of saving a very low quality JPEG. Other than that they were very purdy.
So do what EE said, read a bit. Writing always gets better through reading and writing. With this much room for improvement, I'm agreeing with the silver verdict.
5.5 |
| #13 [151702] |
| 67.176.104.160 |
'Tense was also switched randomly'
I meant [active/passive] voice. Wow, gg me. |
| #14 .Praetor[151804] |
| c-67-172-163-127.client.comcast.net |
Great :(. I'm going to lose my reputation as a harsh rater. I didn't think the report was as bad as all these comments :). Actually, the writing kind of reminded me of my writing. Except it wasn't nearly as detailed or comprehensive. That and you made horrible mistakes like "Me did this".
But your pics were good, given the comments already made about them. And I enjoyed the game. Hey. It was awhile ago, but I can remember when I'm building almost random stuff and just trying to win.
I also realized it wasn't as much of a beatdown as the other commenters seem to think the game was. I've played on Dark Star, and it's hell to move ground forces around that map. Changes play a lot. Play was far from expert, but hey, I'm no Grrr....
I actually thought about giving this game a 7. But it's really a 6. Better than just kind of average, mostly because of the six. |
| #15 The-Nut[151817] |
| ool-182e1a3b.dyn.optonline.net |
| wow.. i thought this was gonna get at least one seven |
| #16 PeaceableGhost[151832] |
| adsl-68-73-192-53.dsl.sfldmi.ameritech.net |
A nice game. I decent report, but not gripping like some others I've read here (Ok, ok, so I'm being unfair.)
I would have said 7, only something about the introduction annoyed me. 6-7 |
| #17 .Praetor[151847] |
| c-67-172-163-127.client.comcast.net |
| Actually, I'm pretty surprised it didn't get a 7 too :). |
| #18 Shuriken[151851] |
| ool-182e1a3b.dyn.optonline.net |
| wheres jv and dag... they'll rate it up :) |
#19  [151910] |
| wc01.wlfdle.rnc.net.cable.rogers.com |
Nice br - really, very nice, and a huge step over your previous efforts. Compared to your other reports that I've read the writing and imagery was vastly superior.
I'm going to agree with Lucky on the images and the coloration, which certainly did get annoying towards the end. I can see why you'd colour the other player's name, but please, don't colour your own ( ugh, I hate using two identical words in one sentence ).
Images were so-so, really. The compostion of the collages felt off at times, the borders were overdone and the graininess was not necessary. I know with the latter effect you were trying to add something original those plain old sc graphics - well, don't. I've almost never seen that successfully done, and in any case there's no way you can make those 2D graphics spectacular anyway, unless you're Breeze. In an SC br, try for clarity and information when crafting images.
The writing was serviceable, and indeed some parts were pretty good, until the glaring error happened along. Oh, and those short little. Abbreviated, repetitive. Sentences really. Got unpleasant after about the first. Paragraph.
So, while after a quick skim it looked like a surefire gold, I'm going to have to give this thing a 6. Sorry to disappoint you Shuriken, maybe JV will be more leniant ;). |
| #20 Shuriken[151932] |
| ool-182e1a3b.dyn.optonline.net |
| its cool dag :) |
| #21 The-Nut[151939] |
| ool-182e1a3b.dyn.optonline.net |
lmao! i like the last picture. :P:P:P
this is a juicy 8
:-D |
| #22 The-Nut[151968] |
| ool-182e1a3b.dyn.optonline.net |
| meant to say that on Shurikens report wtf mates |
| #23 [151980] |
| 67.176.104.160 |
| If it helps I also think this was on a whole nother level from your previosu work. Of course, the only report by you I remember involved you eating hamburgers... so... |
| #24 Chris[151996] |
| astound-66-234-209-235.ca.astound.net |
Big step up. But.
I didn't like the writing style. It was just pretty much "this, and then this, and then this" kind of thing. Not very intriguing.
I didn't like that one choppy ass gif you put it. :)
As a minor detail though, the white background was bad.
Maybe I'm just being an ass. But 7.0. |
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