| #1 kane[153348] |
| c-67-170-196-151.client.comcast.net |
i can't even make sure that my own report worked?
bogus |
| #2 wakiki[153349] |
| cable-24-196-20-228.mtv.al.charter.com |
| 1st non author |
| #3 wakiki[153350] |
| cable-24-196-20-228.mtv.al.charter.com |
OMFG YES that's the first time I've done that.
Will read tomorrow. |
#4 
[153355] |
| 129.142.195.30.ip.tele2adsl.dk |
Was a big fan of the journey, and this is shaping up to be pretty good already.
Hope it won't be too long before the next installment - I'm already digging the theme and writing.
9 |
#5  [153359] |
| d141-165-127.home.cgocable.net |
| Not a bad continuation of a good story. It didn't scream "brilliant" to me, hence I'm not handing it a 9, but still very adept writing. |
| #6 kane[153363] |
| c-67-170-196-151.client.comcast.net |
| well, these are very nice ratings for a first installment =] |
| #7 maniacmarine[153368] |
| d146-16-93.home1.cgocable.net |
| awesome, simply brilliant. more more :D |
| #8 Ironhorn[153370] |
| S01060050ba68ec1e.ed.shawcable.net |
so so SO sad to not hear the ending, I'm sure I will miss meny a nights sleep on it.
Then again though, I'm happy that you chose to start the story over rather then re-read your other chapers and make up the rest as you go along.
Still, a BIG fan of your work, cant wait to see how the re-writing of the story turns out.
FYI: It was my belife that the master was the leader of a group of aliens who wanted to take over the galaxy, enslaving or killing thoughs that got in their way (hence the variety of races working for the master) At one point they attacked the planet of the magiciens, and, realizing they where losing the war, Gerard's father sent the kid-Gerard into space where he finnaly came upon earth.
The master had been setting up an "underground" of spies on earth for a while yet, and that spiky alien dude was like a scout.
Haman and the kid (the name escapes me) where going to turn out to also be magiciens who had been sent into space in suspended animation when the master attacked there planet. The kid took alot longer to get to earth, though, and that is why he is younger (suspended animation). A.K.A. he was secretly adopted.
and thats my theroy, the ending was going to be Argusdain dieing, Gerard, Haman and the kid stoped the invasion of earth, and the master comes down to earth. Haman and Gerard almost lose the fight against him, but the kid descovers his hidden powers and defeats the master.
The three meet up with survivors of their race, but decide to stay on earth. the other magicains may have there own spliner colony on the moon or somthing or they may have stayed on earth (or mabey Gerard Hamen and the kid are the only survivors)
Ok that was longer then expected but there you go. GL ON THE NEW STORY KANE! KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK! |
| #9 [153371] |
| d141-165-127.home.cgocable.net |
| that post is SO hard to read |
#10  [153373] |
| 67.176.104.160 |
haha:
"Then again though,..."
"Still, a BIG fan of your work, cant wait to..."
Then the whole theory... |
| #11 Fungee[153374] |
| hsdbsk142-165-143-157.sasknet.sk.ca |
hi kane
i didn't bother reading your story thing
you have OCD |
| #12 wakiki[153377] |
| cable-66-191-154-210.mtv.al.charter.com |
Heh, finally got around to reading this.
Your writing is excellent. Since this is the very beggining, I have no clue what's going on(obviously) but this was a very good hook to draw me in to the rest of the story. |
| #13 TheAngel[153383] |
| wmlvia41.rit.edu |
| Nice... |
| #14 kane[153388] |
| c-67-170-196-151.client.comcast.net |
| #8's been watching too much dragonball z |
| #15 Ironhorn[153457] |
| S01060050ba68ec1e.ed.shawcable.net |
Can you tell?
Still big fan of your work, anxous to see how this next story turns out. |
| #16 kane[153458] |
| c-67-170-196-151.client.comcast.net |
can you people make fewer comments? please?
writing this almost isn't worth it |
| #17 [153463] |
| 67.176.104.160 |
I wonder if you'll get less comments than my last one. I had 35.
Anyways, as I said before, not going to rate this. Good stuff though. |
| #18 [153469] |
| d141-165-127.home.cgocable.net |
I had a fic once which got 3 comments at the time.
admitedly, it was short/stupid. |
| #19 Decay[153481] |
| dyn57-005.res-hall.ndsu.NoDak.edu |
ok I asked for this so I suppose I better comment. But first I just want to say I don't think it's right to judge anything based on only one chapter. I didn't even start reading the Journey until like the fourth installment, and only then because everyone was talking about it, and I really enjoyed that. As far as I can tell, however, this is shaping up nicely. The plot twists that I loved in the Journey are already appearing. :)
Looking forward to the next installment. |
| #20 Ironhorn[153524] |
| S01060050ba68ec1e.ed.shawcable.net |
The last comment for this story, but Kane, dont you ever EVER say that it isnt worth you writing storys. Your storys are great, and are read by many people. I even refer you to my friends when there looking for a good book.
So dont you EVER say that you should stop writting Kane, cause your one of the greatest internet writers out there, and I can say your next story is going to be a good one, even after reading just one chapter. |
| #21 kane[153563] |
| sl-lab12.rh.uchicago.edu |
| absolutely uninspiring in every way |
| #22 Ironhorn[154772] |
| S01060050ba68ec1e.ed.shawcable.net |
Whents the next chapter comming out?
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| #23 kane[161075] |
| c-67-180-40-190.hsd1.ca.comcast.net |
| 8/30/05 |
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