#1  [164998] |
| dblt-216-227-19-174.gtcom.net |
| Approved! |
| #2 [165000] |
| dblt-216-227-19-174.gtcom.net |
Definite improvement here. Still plenty of work that needs to be done, but you're moving along and that's what's important.
First off, I'm glad to see you using a background and images. However, I would suggest that you center the images and the section titles. Putting a border around your images wouldn't be a bad idea, either. I'm not a big fan of the many different text colors, but if you want to have them try to make sure they all at least are fairly legible (the blue is almost impossible to make out, for me at least). Also, try to take a little more time to make the page itself look a little cleaner, it looks kind of disjointed now. Aesthetics aren't as important as the report itself, but it's always nice to get them as nice as possible.
To get better ratings you're going to have to work on your writing. You don't have to be .Prae or anything, but you do need to give us a lot more details than you have been. Even if you have to make the information uninteresting it's better to give it to us than to not. Then you can work on how to make it interesting. We don't need every detail, but we certainly need more than you're including. It's a pretty hard thing to say just how much detail you need and what counts as important or not but try to cover as much material as you possibly can, and if it's too much we'll work on narrowing it down.
I'm gonna give this a four. I think it deserves a 3.5, but I'm gonna bump it up because I think there's been some improvement here. |
| #3 Psyonic_Reaver[165001] |
| 67-59-78-62.generic.webformix.com |
Maareek is the most dedicated rater we have and I highly recommend what he just told you. There is a fairly thin line on details like he was explaining because some parts need more detail while others need less and, it is hard to see what to add or cut. That is where proof readers come in handy for they allow you to view your text with a brand new set of eyes that hasn't been staring at the report for more then an hour. They can spot things you can easily miss.
As for the English, don't worry too much about it. As you write more and more reports, it will come easier to you. *I hope to see more from you!*
The pictures were nice and added to the report but as Maareek said, they were disorganized. I suggest viewing YourRoleModel's reports or ~CattleBruiser~'s because they have some of the most organized reports you can find on this site. This will help give you some ideas on how you might like to add organized flavor to your future reports.
I would give this a solid 3. Maybe a 4. There is room for improvement which Maareek did an excellent job of outlining. If you follow most of what he suggested but keep your creative style of how you write reports, you will get a gold for sure. |
| #4 Turbo_Noob[165002] |
| c-24-15-79-148.hsd1.il.comcast.net |
| Keep it up kid and one day you'll be like me. |
| #5 ZeonPeon[165019] |
| CPE0015e975d899-CM0012c99f036c.cpe.net.cable.rogers.com |
| Hey Psy. |
| #6 Feanor[165134] |
| p54837212.dip.t-dialin.net |
| Ops, seems as if I came to late... I'm getting a "site not found" info... |
| #7 Blackchaos[165143] |
| 125.156-78-65.ftth.swbr.surewest.net |
Sorry but I deleted the site. It was not that good of a report anyway. I will try making an even better report to make up for it.
Sry ;) |
| #8 [165214] |
| dblt-216-227-26-107.gtcom.net |
| I hope you do write another one soon, I'd like to see what improvements you've made. :) |
| #9 AlferdPacker[165278] |
| gold.allianzlife.com |
| It's a shame you deleted it. It is always interesting to go back and read people's early reports once they've been around a while. |
| #10 Blackchaos[165384] |
| 121.125-30-64.ftth.swbr.surewest.net |
I have been playing Jedi Academy alot and it has stolen my soul. I have also been learning how to make mods for Starcraft. I'll start making a BR soon.
:] |
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